Wednesday, March 16, 2011

Version 02

Here's the second version.

The grayscale with seated figure needs a better figure, but it's there to proof the idea.

What sez yah's - More crits please!


Tom Moon said...

Excellent handling of the added detail on the flyer. It supports the main shapes without distracting from or overwhelming them.

I like the idea of seating a figure on the flyer. Hope to see it fleshed out next version.

MrGoodson2 said...

Nice improvements. The two shapes in the joystick area bother me. I'd say lose the thin stalked , bulb at the top shape. I don't think we can clearly know what it is. It also has an anti stream line shape that makes it seem very "kluged" on. ( I first heard the word kluge at Leland Corp.)

Davis Chino said...

Very nice! Nice job of "plussing" them out. I don't feel the need to see a whole figure on the bike--I like the urgency of the stick man--but then, I don't possess "art-director think."

And I disagree with Ellis; I like the sex-toy aspect.

MrGoodson2 said...

Maybe draw a little highlight gleam over the roll bar. And I disagree with Marty for disagreeing with me.
Maybe on the REMAINING joystick, have the side closest to the driver be a smooth curve, vs the knobbiness

Dok said...

Wonderful stuff - can't thank you all enough for pointed these things out!

I think the piece still has a cartoony feel to it.. which I'm going to try to avoid in the next vehicle.

Thanks again amigos!